The rhythm of the novel starts a bit slow, but then it picks up and I think it becomes exciting.
I have tried to make the characters vivid and believable. I don't like to create a villain who is simply evil and idiotic, nor an MC like that.
I focus quite a bit on the characters and their emotions, so there will be several characters who have emotions and thoughts that can be seen in the novel.
I think there are many exciting and a bit strange elements (For example, different layers of the system, which can connect with other users, and exotic powers of different people like a necromancer who uses teleportation magic).
The world is wide and I try to bring it to life, showing different events in the work, for example descriptions of scenes that happen in other places in the world or universe.
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In the other review posted by me, there are also answers that could have spoilers, beware.
Great story, the start was perfect and you describe the world in which they are living well. I have nothing bad to point out in your novel, your grammar and punctuation are good which is important for a novel.
Would recommend this to everyone who likes system novels.
I really liked the story, I got the idea that the story was a mix between fantasy and science fiction, I hope I can read more chapters, so keep doing what you are doing
Definitely love the world background and the story development as the chapter goes on. And as for the MC, at least he's got some determination to push through with what life throws at him.
The writing works well and the development of the story works quite well. The world-building would be a bit more described but other than that, it's quite good.
the plot is very loved it, the characters especially to the main characters are admiring and I continue to read it by the way I like the synopsis. its very interesting.
Nice, you write well without showing too many mistakes in grammar or punctuation. i like the way youre taking this on the characters. i too am not a fan of 1 dimensional villains or characters that simply have one quirk that defines their whole persona. The world could be described more intricately but i believe youve done a good job. keep writing ✍️
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The rhythm of the novel starts a bit slow, but then it picks up and I think it becomes exciting.
I have tried to make the characters vivid and believable. I don't like to create a villain who is simply evil and idiotic, nor an MC like that.
I focus quite a bit on the characters and their emotions, so there will be several characters who have emotions and thoughts that can be seen in the novel.
I think there are many exciting and a bit strange elements (For example, different layers of the system, which can connect with other users, and exotic powers of different people like a necromancer who uses teleportation magic).
The world is wide and I try to bring it to life, showing different events in the work, for example descriptions of scenes that happen in other places in the world or universe.
In the other review posted by me, there are also answers that could have spoilers, beware.
Would recommend this to everyone who likes system novels.