Immortal World System

I think everything is a bit fast and I love grammar so you understand next problem.
The character explanation was fine but I like a little more details.

I like how the author made plot to tell the education related stuff, it's hilarious to me

i love itttt! because of the comedy as much as because of the adventure! im having a good time reading it! keep it up author! ♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥

Some parts are a bit chaotic and confusing. I also think the flow is too quick and the story needs more descriptions.However,the idea has potential.

Keep it up!

Good story. The main character a bit wishy washy. But I believe in character development. Hopefully he can become strong as soon as possible! Many typo. But its okay!!

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