As in my previous comment I emphasize that it is rushing the story and not doing real world building, I will add that there is a huge problem with the interaction of the characters and the plot in general, where did they meet? When? How did they meet? How was the process of finding a publisher? When did the MC start acting classes? How did he meet his teacher, being that he's a renowned former actor? How was the audition for the role in the theater play and when did it happen?
Honestly, I don't want to sound condescending but it is necessary that you as an author acquire the mentality of asking questions in order to be able to flesh out the plot, because in the current picture it seems that the character just gets the things he wants without any difficulty, besides, it sucks that you put things in that should be implied, such as the character's lack of general inexperience in what is due to things like business, among other things. It takes time to improve, take your time and start acquiring a more inquisitive mindset and this will greatly improve your writing.
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Honestly, I don't want to sound condescending but it is necessary that you as an author acquire the mentality of asking questions in order to be able to flesh out the plot, because in the current picture it seems that the character just gets the things he wants without any difficulty, besides, it sucks that you put things in that should be implied, such as the character's lack of general inexperience in what is due to things like business, among other things. It takes time to improve, take your time and start acquiring a more inquisitive mindset and this will greatly improve your writing.
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