I like it. I'd suggest it to anyone who asked. For some reason I got the song Don't Look Back In Anger by Oasis stuck in my head while reading it... I dunno.
I'm a fan of cultivation and system novels so reading this is a must for me. I'm not picky in terms of grammar, as long as I can read, I'm okay with with.
It's been a while since the last time I read fantasy, but yours took me by surprise. Interesting story! I'm definitely going to keep on reading your story.
This book is worth a read. Although the grammar isn't the best and in some cases the choice of words are quite bad. But it isn't that bad that it disrupts the flow of the novel. Giving the author a 5 star to encourage him
The story is good so far! I like how you vividly narrated the story and the development was nice and steady. I love the plotline and it was an enjoyable read! Keep it going until you reach a million views and you will find it pleasing to the eyes. Characters are showed well with various emotions and I can't help but be attached to them. Kudos and your reader here. Peace ✌️
Your English is good but the crafting is not on the level, I reckon you study a few like viewpoint, Show not tell, and do mind to keep an eye for the little things that may not seem important as it sometimes sets off the readers.
Your main problem I notice reading the first three chapter is that the viewpoint is wrong. it's much like an omniscient telling a story he knows everything about. You should change that to 1st or 3rd person omniscient.
and Show don't tell, all the aspiring author get through this, I myself was an example. I fixed this problem through revising as I'm not still good enough to follow.
that's all my personal thoughts reading the first 3 chapters.
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Recommendation, yes, try it
Your main problem I notice reading the first three chapter is that the viewpoint is wrong. it's much like an omniscient telling a story he knows everything about. You should change that to 1st or 3rd person omniscient.
and Show don't tell, all the aspiring author get through this, I myself was an example. I fixed this problem through revising as I'm not still good enough to follow.
that's all my personal thoughts reading the first 3 chapters.
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