Listen, if your new to webnovel and like isekai than this novel is for you, but tbh the plot and cliches in the book is like a copy and paste of every other isekai be it novel, manga, or anime. So for experienced readers who are sick of the same plot outline then steer clear and save yourselves the lost time. Now feedback for author San, not bad at all for the novel, it was kinda rushed at the beginning and felt slightly forced, but everything connected and the flow of speech and storyline made sense so congrats on that. (Plz dont use the typical isekai plot template for a novel ever again, although the loli is not a bad idea and attracts more readers you gotta be careful that it doesn't transform into a typical oversaturated plotline)
The world building is realistic & logical. After 50 chapters, there is still no stereotypical trope of using modern knowledge to make glass/ gun/cement to speed up civilization nonsense. The MC understands that he has to use this world knowledge of magic with modern society ideology of social structure to build his kingdom.
Honestly grammar is pretty bad, and could use better spacing, but overall it's pretty good. I would recommend this only if you're bored because it's kinda cliche tho.
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English and Grammar is appropriate. Minimum errors on all current chapters which is good. As it does not have that much chapters, an appropriate review for plot, character, and world background would not be given. However, for a beginning, it would be overall be better than an good amount of works already.Keep up the good work. Happy writing!
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