get Lucky or die

"Tssk, what an idiot, he must've forgotten you still are the titled," "Spear King."

You're bundled up now, wait till you get older

Don’t make it a wish fulfillment novel make it one that gets into the nit and grit of the marvel world along with comedy to keep it light making a harem practically makes it a wish fulfillment novel if not done right, make it into a book you enjoy and love to write, that appeals to a broad group of people, make it so people don’t want to instantly click away do to it being like the rest of the generic novels out their. What I am saying is no do not make it a harem, make it different then all of the wish fulfillment novels that are on webnovel.

not bad first chapter keep up the good work

Overall it's pretty good! It can drag in some parts and feels like info is being dumped on us at the beginning, but it's got a lot of potential. Also, be careful that you don't switch tenses mid-sentence (past to present). You don't do it often, but it sticks out when you do.

Seems interesting so far... It looks like the author is going to be pretty prolific, which is always a nice thing. I'm looking forward to it!

a creative idea . I am really admire it, but the only problem I had that is the name is too long for reader to search for the novel. wish you to change the name into something more easier like " a observer