Over 500 chapters were free, now you need to pay ss to get past chapter 57. I have nothing against paid chapters, but suddenly starting to charge for previously free chapters is so scummy.I do like the novel, but this is ridiculous 0/10
A good opening with it's currently 24 chapters, the characters have a clear motivation and the story setup is interesting. There is some room for improvement in the writing such as grammar and sentence structures and in the more descriptive parts. Sometimes we get the explanation after it already happened which makes the story a bit choppy. Overall right now there's alot of room for improvement which at times take away from the story at certain points but also means that this already interesting story can get even better. Looking forward to reading more. Keep it up!
The work has a very good idea. A well summarized but relatively strange synopsis may not please many, so I suggest you take a look at it later. I can't give too much of a review given there isn't much content available at the moment, however. here are some things about the work: The writing is normal/okay and doesn't get in the way, but it could be improved. Grammatical errors are constant and, if possible or necessary, I highly recommend using tools that can help you fix this. Also remember to improve the spacing you use between lines; in some situations it was a bit confusing to understand the descriptions.The idea is cool and can be worked on to improve over time. I'll try to stay here on your journey, and I'll come back later to make further observations about the work. Finally, sorry for the somewhat "superficial" review, and keep up the good work.
This is one of the best originals I've seen on this site and everyone should try to read it. That being said there are two major faults with worldbuilding I'd like to point out. This shouldn't stop anyone from trying it, though.First, the money. This new world works like a tribal society. There's no agreement between tribes or races to enforce the usage of gold and silver as currency. No one trusts one another, humans and non-humans. There's no reason for gold and silver to be accepted as currency to the whole world. At best it could maybe be traded by weight in gold, but even that is fickle. People need survivability, not precious metals from Earth that should have no value there.The worst is that the author had the perfect plot device to avoid using gold: Essence. If people could exchange Essence between them, there is no reason for gold and it's pretty clear that, plot wise, essence is meaningful for everyone, no matter the race, and universally acceptable.Second: Manuals. The world has a system where characters can level up stats or get skill from monsters they kill, using 'Essence'. Yet, the author added books that the MC would find and learn techniques, Wuxia-style.That really didn't go well with his system plot. It would be far better for them to be regular skills from the system. Like the dagger technique he got by killing a bandit, for example, instead of a book the character should have a chance to gain the skill of the target, monster or human, this way he would have only the skills the Author wants him to have in the end. Like I said, overall this is a very good novel, but these two points stuck like a sore thumb for me. I'd even advise the author to rewrite them. It'd be a pain, but worth the hassle.
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