I read till chapter 8 and couldn't take it anymore. Here is the constructive criticism everyone in this website asks for if you give a novel 2 stars without a review (when clearly people are giving 5 stars without reading)
English: nice
Story: Not trying to be cliche but so totally cliche till chapter 8
Tournament plot, cultivation manuals, beauty takes interest cuz why not,
Strong to weak with some random cheat
Now here is a plot hole. (there are more but i don't wanna be too hard on the author since i think it is his first time writing lmao)
Apparently played the game for but doesn't know anything about the game except the power system (was he a fking slave in the game? He doesn't know fking anything except the history)
My disagreements.
Every character acts like a person from your typical wuxia novel.
Let me give an example why i rate this. All the example happen in the chapter.
1. Author math skill is kindergarden.
2. There is no spatial ring but the enemy suddenly have a golem, a robot, a fkin laser gun in his ass.
3. which one is important your *** time or your family live ? In author case he choose ***. Smh.
4. Why the fk there is no screening when recruit a soldier. Why the fk a soldier can join private organization ? Do u want the military itself to collapse ?
5. The fighting in military base did not alert other. Even with a robot with nuclear energy blowing up.
6. The military base defence system is fkin weak that even summoning an evil spirit or in middle of the base did not alert their system defence. Not to mention no anti teleport defence. Wtf. Its a fkin military base not your fkin grandfather house.
I don't like or dislike your story. Although I was disappointed that the story wasn't something special and was filled with cliches, I haven't anything overwhelmingly negative to say about the story.
The MC is bland (so he's not overly annoying or great he's just there) the side characters are side characters.
The world building is fine i guess.
The reason why this story is a 2.5 (slightly below average) rather then a 3 (average) for me is the plot progression. Like I said the story is really cliche , and for many stories cliches are not always bad, but in the case of this specific story it's in your face bad. Things that should've been lengthened in small proportions for basic readers enjoyment like the 'romance' (if I can even call it that) happens way to quickly and way to forcefully. Also, yes I know the real world is filled with people who do things like *** quickly but this is a fantasy and not the real world.
Overall before I go on a long tangent and bore the c-rap ( only way I can spell that without getting censored) i'd like instead to rap this review up.
The story is not bad but it offers no memorial moments and I probably won't remember any of the characters names in t -minus 10 minutes. Yep already forgotten it.
Just me but full of 5 star sparm that give no reason for their 5 star and I was not here to anger anybody but I will neutralize these sparm!!!
FOR THE LEGION!
FOR THE LEGION!!
FOR THE LEGION!!!
FOR THE LEGION!!!!
At this point I can't even tell if this is actually an original novel or a half-decent translation of a trashy mech/gene cultivation CN webnovel...
MC still the same... And loves arguing with opponents in battle... is also complete trash who can't deal with returning enemy he already defeated... Thinks with his jiji too much
Retarded weak MC thinks more about getting p**ssy than getting op and dominating the world with his system
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The story was fine but this has they absolutely worst romance and harem I have ever seen how can u about to get raped and all ur most loved items get destroyed and ur sister is in the next room fucking and u fall in love with that guy instead of getting mad they didn’t help u dropped
You really have a good story backgroud, but its a shame that you can't develop your story well.
As far as ch 81, you keep dumping "information". I think this kind of writting style is way too boring. No real development of story, just excessive amount of information. Even if you skip the "history" or some "information" it wouldn't affect the other stories, so until ch 81, i just read 2-3 page, and skimming the other excessive BS.
The idea was good, but the shallowness of the characters and random events that fit into a wuxia novel, with the goal of making a passive, ***** MC OP is just sad. It was good in the first 5 chapters when the world was being introduced and that’s about it. Became utter garbage afterwards.
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English: nice
Story: Not trying to be cliche but so totally cliche till chapter 8
Tournament plot, cultivation manuals, beauty takes interest cuz why not,
Strong to weak with some random cheat
Now here is a plot hole. (there are more but i don't wanna be too hard on the author since i think it is his first time writing lmao)
Apparently played the game for but doesn't know anything about the game except the power system (was he a fking slave in the game? He doesn't know fking anything except the history)
My disagreements.
Every character acts like a person from your typical wuxia novel.
Not gonna say anymore. Good luck. Bye bye.
1. Author math skill is kindergarden.
2. There is no spatial ring but the enemy suddenly have a golem, a robot, a fkin laser gun in his ass.
3. which one is important your *** time or your family live ? In author case he choose ***. Smh.
4. Why the fk there is no screening when recruit a soldier. Why the fk a soldier can join private organization ? Do u want the military itself to collapse ?
5. The fighting in military base did not alert other. Even with a robot with nuclear energy blowing up.
6. The military base defence system is fkin weak that even summoning an evil spirit or in middle of the base did not alert their system defence. Not to mention no anti teleport defence. Wtf. Its a fkin military base not your fkin grandfather house.
The MC is bland (so he's not overly annoying or great he's just there) the side characters are side characters.
The world building is fine i guess.
The reason why this story is a 2.5 (slightly below average) rather then a 3 (average) for me is the plot progression. Like I said the story is really cliche , and for many stories cliches are not always bad, but in the case of this specific story it's in your face bad. Things that should've been lengthened in small proportions for basic readers enjoyment like the 'romance' (if I can even call it that) happens way to quickly and way to forcefully. Also, yes I know the real world is filled with people who do things like *** quickly but this is a fantasy and not the real world.
Overall before I go on a long tangent and bore the c-rap ( only way I can spell that without getting censored) i'd like instead to rap this review up.
The story is not bad but it offers no memorial moments and I probably won't remember any of the characters names in t -minus 10 minutes. Yep already forgotten it.
FOR THE LEGION!
FOR THE LEGION!!
FOR THE LEGION!!!
FOR THE LEGION!!!!
MC still the same... And loves arguing with opponents in battle... is also complete trash who can't deal with returning enemy he already defeated... Thinks with his jiji too much
Retarded weak MC thinks more about getting p**ssy than getting op and dominating the world with his system
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As far as ch 81, you keep dumping "information". I think this kind of writting style is way too boring. No real development of story, just excessive amount of information. Even if you skip the "history" or some "information" it wouldn't affect the other stories, so until ch 81, i just read 2-3 page, and skimming the other excessive BS.