Tried to be somewhat honest here.Love the story so far up to chapter 40.I do have some things that irk me but let's start off with it's a perfect setup. love the twist and laughed at brother making a move. overall is a new take on something I haven't seen done and I really can't wait to see how it works out.now the bad things.like this post the grammar is not the best and some words are missing here and there. but I don't care much about it because Im worse.the overall mc is kinda a big baby. he acts like he has no social skills with the female lead but he can act and talk fine to everyone else. he gets uncomfortable and acts a certain way that just doesn't come across as his normal character. now it can be overlooked but it's very noticeable and in many guy roles the character just doesn't fit. perhaps more of a build up and backstory or maybe a reason why he acts in a certain way with her. but when you have another female mentioned from school and he plays paintball with 8 friends... you know his social skills are not that lacking.for the female lead I think she's very pushy and wants to be a man and as you see she's doing it because the role she is in. there is reasons and it works and maybe some backstory? who knows just keep making those chapters.in all if you can spare to read this ugly post of mine then you can read this book. I give it 4 stars and I hope to see more.
The MC hasn't made any idiotic mistakes, the plot flows smoothly, and the side characters are pretty interesting (especially the gamers). I think this story has potential. π
Good fan_fic with potential πππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππ
so far the trail read was fun.the only thing i found the mc coward. but it was a bit funny to read.the choices that system give made the MC into troublemaker and death seeking idiot. π
Nian Gao nodded with a whine while Chun Juan saluted with a deep resolve in its eyes. Chu fan smiled and nodded his head happily. He then got up and turned around to face his friends.
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