13+ chapters in and I can really say for sure that this one's a lot better than the original one, that one is not bad, but this one is a lot better. I just paraphrased what Daniiii said.
After reading just a few chapters and comparing them with previous version it is clear to me that this one is much more promising.
character design has improved a lot which I think is the most important difference between this book and the old one.[img=recommend][img=recommend]
so far this novel feels dark and interesting. writting is 5/5, author is doing a good job describing other characters as well, lot of things feels mysterious and i like they are not forcefuly explained straight away. I got to ch. 10 and i am super exited about how this will continue
Amazing Plot.. I loved the concept so much and your writing style is very easy. I could visualize every scenes and I enjoyed what I saw while reading ( well that's the fun part of reading)
Author-san-special-five-star-review!!! 1st version!
I want to say it’s the first and only version, but knowing me, I’m prob gonna have to change this one day or another.
Anyhow, let’s get to the review.
STORY DEVELOPMENT – Tone
Okay, this time it’s really gonna be a grim-dark story. I know I said the same last time and it turned out to be a feel-good slice-of-life, but trust me, alright. Just read like, the first 2 chaps and you’ll see it.
Obviously, it’s not gonna be all gloom and depression. Slice-of-life will happen (since I love it), there will be comedy, romance, action, adventure, and all that good stuff.
One more thing I wanna add here is the mysteriousness of the novel. I know it sounds kinda pretentious coming from me, calling my novel mysterious and all, but what I mean is just that I’ll try my best to withhold certain info from the readers.
The reason for this is that I ****ed up a lot on SotNeW, by explaining every detail of the story as they appeared. Not cool.
STORY DEVELOPMENT – Pacing.
Things will happen faster this time around. Last time, whenever I wrote a scene, almost always, I would stick it into the story without deleting it (even though they were completely filler), but I’ll do it this time. Scenes will die, since I’m gonna have a proper stockpile this time around.
And also, Author-san ascended, and like, learned how to skip useless parts in scenes. Very epic.
STORY DEVELOPMENT – Side Stories.
Different POVs and other stories will appear more. I’ll just say that. Also, depending on stuff, I might rewrite previously written scenes in the POV of a different character. I’ll try to make this clearer as we go about the story.
Also, remastered Layla story incoming, pog. And yes, I’ll take a part from that and chuck it into the synopsis. He-he-he.
CHARACTERS – MC
MC will have an interesting character arc this time around, how about that?
CHARACTERS – Side charas.
I have plans to tie more side charas to MC’s story, in a more intimate and non-conversational way. And t r y … to develop their arcs in that manner, but I’m not sure how that’ll work out in reality.
It'll probably be okay.
Oh yeah, also, Romance~~
WORLD-BUILDING
I mentioned this before, but I’m gonna try to withhold certain information, so their reveal will be more satisfying later on. I know the older readers will have knowledge about some details due to the rewrite, but I’ll try my best to keep things spicy for everyone.
MAGIC SYSTEM
The fundamentals for this will not change, but I’m gonna add a lot of quality-of-life changes to the usage of Worlds. It will still be a Hard Magic System , but I’m gonna try and add a Softer side to it as well.
SETTING and WORLD BACKGROUND
Some things will be uncheatable, but they’ll be much rarer compared to the previous version. This will add a sense of risk to actions and give birth to more interesting choices.
MISCELLANEOUS STUFF
-No harem planned.
-There will be cliches, but I’ll give them my own touch. I think you'll like it a lot.
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Alright, I think that's it. Ask me if you have any questions ;3
Spoiler alert: This is a damn fantastic book.
I love how the author sets you up with a ton of mystery and questions at the start then artfully lets it unfold around you as you read. Ooh the level of skill gave me shivers!
The characters, more particularly their dynamics with each other, are superb. Evin is fantastic, he is witty, opinionated, but equally tormented by his father and burdened by the pressures of society. He has hopes, dreams, and the author does a great job of making believable, if not entirely realistic characters. Such raw emotion in a book is hard to come by, too. I really felt so much for all of them.
The world building was equally as good. Although I had a lot of questions at the start, the more I read the more everything pieced itself together, unravelling the mysterys of the world like any good book should. Not once did I lose interest, the story was fast paced, well thought out, and bolstered by some absolutely top quality description.
If you cant tell, I really dont have any bad things to say about this book. Perhaps give a little warning about the abusive nature of the father? But honestly, this novel was so compelling, I would recommend it to anyone either way.
Author, fantastic work!
just added to my library., when I read a new novel especially an Original one, I usually spend time to read up to 5 chapters only then decide whether to continue or not.. well this novel I got so caught up reading it.
it's well written and I like the pace or how the story unfolds, since it's only 26 chaps as of now, all I can say is the author did a great job and this novel has a potential to be a great story.
hopefully it continues to update and finish this novel... bcoz most of the Original novel I read so far, either went on hiatus or with no ending..
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character design has improved a lot which I think is the most important difference between this book and the old one.[img=recommend][img=recommend]
Good work, Author!!
I want to say it’s the first and only version, but knowing me, I’m prob gonna have to change this one day or another.
Anyhow, let’s get to the review.
STORY DEVELOPMENT – Tone
Okay, this time it’s really gonna be a grim-dark story. I know I said the same last time and it turned out to be a feel-good slice-of-life, but trust me, alright. Just read like, the first 2 chaps and you’ll see it.
Obviously, it’s not gonna be all gloom and depression. Slice-of-life will happen (since I love it), there will be comedy, romance, action, adventure, and all that good stuff.
One more thing I wanna add here is the mysteriousness of the novel. I know it sounds kinda pretentious coming from me, calling my novel mysterious and all, but what I mean is just that I’ll try my best to withhold certain info from the readers.
The reason for this is that I ****ed up a lot on SotNeW, by explaining every detail of the story as they appeared. Not cool.
STORY DEVELOPMENT – Pacing.
Things will happen faster this time around. Last time, whenever I wrote a scene, almost always, I would stick it into the story without deleting it (even though they were completely filler), but I’ll do it this time. Scenes will die, since I’m gonna have a proper stockpile this time around.
And also, Author-san ascended, and like, learned how to skip useless parts in scenes. Very epic.
STORY DEVELOPMENT – Side Stories.
Different POVs and other stories will appear more. I’ll just say that. Also, depending on stuff, I might rewrite previously written scenes in the POV of a different character. I’ll try to make this clearer as we go about the story.
Also, remastered Layla story incoming, pog. And yes, I’ll take a part from that and chuck it into the synopsis. He-he-he.
CHARACTERS – MC
MC will have an interesting character arc this time around, how about that?
CHARACTERS – Side charas.
I have plans to tie more side charas to MC’s story, in a more intimate and non-conversational way. And t r y … to develop their arcs in that manner, but I’m not sure how that’ll work out in reality.
It'll probably be okay.
Oh yeah, also, Romance~~
WORLD-BUILDING
I mentioned this before, but I’m gonna try to withhold certain information, so their reveal will be more satisfying later on. I know the older readers will have knowledge about some details due to the rewrite, but I’ll try my best to keep things spicy for everyone.
MAGIC SYSTEM
The fundamentals for this will not change, but I’m gonna add a lot of quality-of-life changes to the usage of Worlds. It will still be a Hard Magic System , but I’m gonna try and add a Softer side to it as well.
SETTING and WORLD BACKGROUND
Some things will be uncheatable, but they’ll be much rarer compared to the previous version. This will add a sense of risk to actions and give birth to more interesting choices.
MISCELLANEOUS STUFF
-No harem planned.
-There will be cliches, but I’ll give them my own touch. I think you'll like it a lot.
-----
Alright, I think that's it. Ask me if you have any questions ;3
I love how the author sets you up with a ton of mystery and questions at the start then artfully lets it unfold around you as you read. Ooh the level of skill gave me shivers!
The characters, more particularly their dynamics with each other, are superb. Evin is fantastic, he is witty, opinionated, but equally tormented by his father and burdened by the pressures of society. He has hopes, dreams, and the author does a great job of making believable, if not entirely realistic characters. Such raw emotion in a book is hard to come by, too. I really felt so much for all of them.
The world building was equally as good. Although I had a lot of questions at the start, the more I read the more everything pieced itself together, unravelling the mysterys of the world like any good book should. Not once did I lose interest, the story was fast paced, well thought out, and bolstered by some absolutely top quality description.
If you cant tell, I really dont have any bad things to say about this book. Perhaps give a little warning about the abusive nature of the father? But honestly, this novel was so compelling, I would recommend it to anyone either way.
Author, fantastic work!
The author is amazing at story-telling and character development. You think you figured something but you get hit with a curveball!
I didn't get it at first, but be patient as most of the unexplained is explained in due time in a way that makes sense and is easy to comprehend.
I enjoyed reading this novel and can't wait for more chapters, t-there's still so much I need to know!
it's well written and I like the pace or how the story unfolds, since it's only 26 chaps as of now, all I can say is the author did a great job and this novel has a potential to be a great story.
hopefully it continues to update and finish this novel... bcoz most of the Original novel I read so far, either went on hiatus or with no ending..