Very interesting. I am intrigued in the sibling relationship and the MC's goals. I want to see what kind of plot the author has laid out.
Writing Quality: I can see the quality of the writing and that you try very hard to edit. There is still small grammar errors, but overall content was prestine. I do have a pet peave for authors who tell action words, instead of showing the action. (Example: Sigh, *cough cough)
Story Development: The pace of the story is perfect for this kind of genre.
Character Design: I can see Zuifan's personality vividly. Just wondering if Chunu will have a big role because she seems invisible to me. Perhaps give her more descriptions.
World Background: Good world building. So far the book is slowly explaining itself.
I will be sincere here; I really liked the book.
From Your writing to how you narrate the story, I loved the mild sarcasm used, Not many can do this, and you did it in the perfect way possible. For me, it is complete five stars; I can't wait to read more of this.
With a great author like this one and a such storyline that clears away the boredom from the old boring novel concepts. I can't wait to see more from you author. Keep going
Well written and thought out story. Can be confusing at times but it won't last long. It's a decent read in my opinion but it's not for me, it's too boring or what can I say ummmm.......... Story feels kinda bland for my taste. You can give it a try before Deciding yourself.
Grat read, i ate all the chapters in 2 days. We have shamelessnes, fun and interesting plot to spice it up. I did not really like the MC at the start ( i usually read evil mc stories), but it goes for the better realy fast. I had a lot of fun reading it and my advice to all of you, would be to give it a try. Author looks like a good and communicative, and i had a lot of fun reading it.
A compelling read.
It does more than just tells a story, it enlightens and keeps the readers wanting to know more and more. Very well written, well described with an alluring synopsis sure to pull the readers in for more. As said earlier, compelling. The author is doing a great job. An already really good story bound to get better with each chapter.
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Particularly the mc who constantly makes excuses for being passive and pathetic
The mc pretends he is avoiding trouble but he is just a coward (the irony being that he looks for trouble)
The similarity to japanese wimp mcs is unpleasant
Writing Quality: I can see the quality of the writing and that you try very hard to edit. There is still small grammar errors, but overall content was prestine. I do have a pet peave for authors who tell action words, instead of showing the action. (Example: Sigh, *cough cough)
Story Development: The pace of the story is perfect for this kind of genre.
Character Design: I can see Zuifan's personality vividly. Just wondering if Chunu will have a big role because she seems invisible to me. Perhaps give her more descriptions.
World Background: Good world building. So far the book is slowly explaining itself.
From Your writing to how you narrate the story, I loved the mild sarcasm used, Not many can do this, and you did it in the perfect way possible. For me, it is complete five stars; I can't wait to read more of this.
It does more than just tells a story, it enlightens and keeps the readers wanting to know more and more. Very well written, well described with an alluring synopsis sure to pull the readers in for more. As said earlier, compelling. The author is doing a great job. An already really good story bound to get better with each chapter.