Writing quality is very good, very minor spelling mistakes(gendered words sometimes mismatched, couple words are missing a letter or have a wrong letter turning it into another word) overall you wouldn't really notice the mistakes and generally won't be missing any information due to the mistakes. There are some noticeably cringe moments in the book but overall, it doesn't make the book worse.The story development is excellent. The author puts a lot of effort into the story and how it develops. The story lacks much of the info dumps commonly seen in the Vr gaming genre as the story takes more of a wait-and-see approach in understanding how the world works. The story develops outside the Vr world and the author creates a unique world that is not earth to help the reader suspend their disbelief and avoid large info dumps.Overall the story so far is very good and interesting and doesn't feel like a bore to read. The story is still very early in its development but still has interesting plot points that engage the reader. For fans of the Vr genre, this is a treat that is different than other Vr genre books with how there is a real story outside the game and how the main character isn't overpowered or super serious about the game.
The beginning wasn't that great but after the story gets really interesting. I really liked how she didn't pretend to be a nice white lotuse type or an op get everything right Mary Sue type character. She's strong but not unbelievable strong and she's not the brightest but she's not a ditz either. Some of her ideas are kinda dumb but I don't really know how old she is so she could still be in middle school which would make sense for most of the characters here and the whole body hasn't developed thing. Overall I'm really enjoying it so far! Keep up the good work!
After an hour of traveling, Lucmar began to slow. Before him stood a decrepit fortess, crumbled and moss filled. Lucmar entered the courtyard and saw him. The only other one of his kind. He was short than Lucmar, standing at around seven feet. His fur was torn and gray. "So, you've finally found me." the Last said," Lucmar the kind." Lucmar cringed at the title, "This is what must be done. We are the lowest of filth which should have never existed. The blood and tears of the young and old have soaking into our paws, just because we craved for suffering." At that Lucmar drew his sword and stepped forward, vanishing mid-step. He appeared behind the Last and split open his back,nearly severing his spine. In a panic, the Last threw himself away from Lucmar at inhuman speed. But he was too slow, because once again Lucmar appeared behind him and this time the blade passed completely from one side to the other. As the dying beady lay there, bisected, Lucmar leaned over his final and vowed "I will remain. Even a death a hundred times worse than this would be too pleasant for me . The last of the damned and a guardian for the ones we would have hurt, that will be my sentencing." As Marakon's body died, the last thing he saw was a single drop falling from Lucmar's eye as he turned away.
Melewati rekan tim kami yang sedang duduk santai di lobi. Tidak menghiraukan panggilan mereka. Terus melangkah hingga masuk kedalam lift. Perasaan canggung terlihat jelas di wajah kami. Hanya diam menunggu lift tiba di lantai yang kami tuju. Pintu lift terbuka, Sehun lebih dulu keluar setelahnya barulah aku melangkah mengikuti langkah panjangnya. Tepat dihadapan kamarku, dia menghentikan langkahnya. Menyerahkan plastik itu kepadaku. Segera ku raih dan cepat-cepat merogoh plastik itu untuk mengambil plastik kecil yang sudah aku pisahkan. Kuberikan barang miliknya padanya. Ia menerimanya. Tanpa mengatakan apapun dan langsung melangkah masuk kedalam kamarnya.
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