The plot line is really unique. Your writing style is good too, it's direct and clear. But I would suggest you to split some sentences and separate them because they tend to become too wordy and sometimes a bit confusing. Apart from that, it's a really interesting read. Keep up the good work!
Well, you need to improve the settings and such describe with 5 senses avoid to direct storytelling put feelings make the MC react :D also keep writing it improves the more you go so I await the further publishment
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