It is very refreshing to see a story setting in Nepal! Though the book looks like a general game trope, it has a unique flavour to it. The plot is engaging and made me stick to it. There are only few chapters when I'm giving this. So, I really hope to see more chapters. Great work!!!!
Good job by our dear mate. Keep writing , keep progressing. We are always there for you.Do more and more progress. Detailed things are here , easy to make films through details
For some reason I was not expecting a system to appear, but, let's see how It will turn out, the story itself is very well written and has a fast pace.
I love what's happening with this novel
It sorta gives off the Solo Leveling vibe in some small places but totally unique.
World was built up greatly and everything was fleshed out wonderfully.
Good work Author-San! XD
REVIEW
Narration: Decent and immersive
Worldbuilding: Vast and detailed
Character development: Nice and steady
Character design: Outstanding
Dialogues: Realistic and Lifelike
Pacing: Not fast nor too slow
Writing quality: Magnificent
Execution of the Genre: Good pitch
Story potential: High
Updating Stability: Steady
MESSAGE
I am deeply happy that the author joined spirity. As it has the potential to win! With more exposure, this will become great and even reach a million views! Or anime adaptation even a movie! Kudos on your work and See you in December (if you know what I mean)
Its alright for your first attempt. Keep it up for I liked it. Just don't drop it.
Be stable. I think you lack the ability to explain an event pretty clearly and in a stable way. But I think you can improve it after some period.
I think that you don't make grammatical mistakes and your writing is alright.
I have to say, as a massive fan of the Zelda video games I absolutely loved this! Gave me serious Breath of the Wild vibes. Loved the idea of goblins and creatures suddenly appearing from all over the world, and temples which have to be cleared to level up and progress - straight out of an RPG game. The fight scenes as the protagonist battles his way through small hordes of goblins are all great, as diverse as can be in various sword tactics and very well-written. I liked how the protagonist has developed from a meek child and is transforming himself into the hero of the piece as he discovers he has a natural ability to defeat the goblins and is growing in strength the more enemies he defeats. Really great stuff so far. This story has a really pacy opening and has limitless potential to go very far. Highly recommend giving this a go.
Popular Reviews
It sorta gives off the Solo Leveling vibe in some small places but totally unique.
World was built up greatly and everything was fleshed out wonderfully.
Good work Author-San! XD
Narration: Decent and immersive
Worldbuilding: Vast and detailed
Character development: Nice and steady
Character design: Outstanding
Dialogues: Realistic and Lifelike
Pacing: Not fast nor too slow
Writing quality: Magnificent
Execution of the Genre: Good pitch
Story potential: High
Updating Stability: Steady
MESSAGE
I am deeply happy that the author joined spirity. As it has the potential to win! With more exposure, this will become great and even reach a million views! Or anime adaptation even a movie! Kudos on your work and See you in December (if you know what I mean)
Be stable. I think you lack the ability to explain an event pretty clearly and in a stable way. But I think you can improve it after some period.
I think that you don't make grammatical mistakes and your writing is alright.