to start love the story and mc i love the fact that he has naivety and if it wasn't for those fake sisters it would be better. second the writing is all over even in the 100s small spelling mistakes are made sometimes you have trouble even reading a sentence. third why did you put him close to such people their still making the same mistake all over again if ryuu wasnt so naive I think he would have left already or at the very least kept their relationship at a professional level.third at times you just skip out on parts to go to a future date then sometimes you will highlight parts that's not so important while making other parts that could be important seem small. fourth you started off with a heavenly dao child but then it seemed you didn't like that so you both slowed his cultivation and skipped over his whole training. fifth this book is great just missing a lot to get to awesome. maybe I'll come back one day to finish reading it.
This week's trial read is becoming better and better in almost every aspect. I am very much intrigued by the flow of this novel; it is not that unique, but it has this sort of air that pulls readers to be trapped within and not escape anyhow. This is an excellent start for a beautiful read.
hello dear author i go through your your book and it was so interesting but i discover that you lack follower, reads and rating but am not sure if you have any social media platforms so we can discuss better
[*sigh* Pure yang does not birth, pure yin does not grow. That's all the hints I'm giving you. Good night Jin. Oh, and anyone who reads through your memories would get an altered version of Shirou Emiya's backstory. Have fun with that~]
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