Story is extremely fragmented, repeated perspective changes that don't really develop the story, repeated memory skips to different times without warning or reason. Trying to read this is like trying to pay attention after taking a heroic dose of mushrooms and you're at the peak.
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Because ur story has high emotional rollercoaster rides. There are very positive characters and they are self efficient and motivated. We can read these chapters with smile on your face and positively in your heart.
The book is good no doubt about it Good job
The problem is the mc he's not getting strong at all he's getting weaker every chapter
2ndly his reasonings is so flawed it's borderline stupid like he forgets that he used to b an old soul 00179
3rdly the pure mana requiment hollow thing makes no sense at all his body was made by the best of the best in the world but took him 12year to absorb miniscule mana am like wtf.
Without all this inconsistencies this book would b great I still recommend it.
theme, story line were very good. but the description was very bad.
eg: if the MC has a scene to open a cap on bottle. it is enough to say " MC opened the cap of bottle".
But the writers describes as " MC touched the cap. then holder the cap on to parallel sides with thumb and forefinger. He then applied torque to rotate the cap......blah....blah...blah........" making the whole story boring.
Started reading this, haven't gotten that far, about 20 chapters in now, but have given up due to the grammar. There were just too many cases of wrong pronouns, mixed tenses and then weird cases of stating something with the name of the item used, e.g. The masters sword, with the author then right afterwards asking what it was, even though the MC has been using swords his whole life.
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Hello! Hope you're having a good day reading my novel!
This is my first novel, but please, don't go easy on me. The only way to improve my writing and for you to enjoy my novel is to send me a feedback! Be it a good or harsh one.
But I'm going to be shameless here, again. Throw in some stones, vote, send this to your library, send gifts, and everything in your power for this novel to improve a lot!
So? Hit those subscribe button , like, and follow me on...wait wrong platform!
Hit those 5 star buttons! And ride with me to the top!
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Thanks again guys!
The flow of the story is smooth.
Solid world building so far. Slow yet not too slow.
Promising story, and the author is proactive.
Try it, maybe this is your cup of tea.
The problem is the mc he's not getting strong at all he's getting weaker every chapter
2ndly his reasonings is so flawed it's borderline stupid like he forgets that he used to b an old soul 00179
3rdly the pure mana requiment hollow thing makes no sense at all his body was made by the best of the best in the world but took him 12year to absorb miniscule mana am like wtf.
Without all this inconsistencies this book would b great I still recommend it.
eg: if the MC has a scene to open a cap on bottle. it is enough to say " MC opened the cap of bottle".
But the writers describes as " MC touched the cap. then holder the cap on to parallel sides with thumb and forefinger. He then applied torque to rotate the cap......blah....blah...blah........" making the whole story boring.