All Hail The Queen

"And a second round of burger and milkshakes' on me." Alyssa said and made her way towards the kitchen to get the treat ready.

You'll never shine if you don't glow

But, the nurse was there.

Chapters are getting better... Keep writing please                                                                                                      

Story is well written, and has quite a bit of future potential. Just remember this though, if you yourself, enjoy writing your stories, then that is the one thing that should matter the most more then anything else. Sometimes, it is not about any sort of money or payment, but should in fact, always be about enjoying sharing your work with your viewers and fans. And that, should always take priority, because if your fans and viewers enjoy reading your work, as well as potential future generations, then that is the one thing, that should matter more to you then anything else. For you see, people are more concerned in living in the here and now. While people me, we like to have a more, long game in mind. Now, don't take this as some sort of negative by any means, I am just saying, that if we want future generations to enjoy this world, then we have to be willing to protect what we love, in an effort to do our best to better our future.

not bad, has the suspense feeling in it..