A New World, an immersive game experience

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As of chapter 47

Writing Quality: 4/5
Some spelling and grammer mistakes throughout the story. However this does not spoil the story and can be easily understood despite the minor mistakes.

Story Development: 5/5
Despite only being 47 chapters so far, the story development is interesting. The fact that the author plays the role of VR extremely prominently is nice, but it would be more interesting if the MC backstory was shown as well. The battle scenes are done really well in this novel. The fact that the intro of the game (trailer) gave the storyline a strong foothold is interesting as other authors tend to not use such things. This is very unique to this story so i give the author props for implementing this unique dynamic.

Character Design: 4/5
This takes into account that the novel is only 47 chapters long so far. There is little background information on the MC. How well to do his family is, etc. (there is some information but not alot). The side characters are not really evident at this point besides the female lead (potential love interest). Only some names are being thrown around here and there without any interesting or distinct facts about them.

Updating Stability: 5/5
I do not know the stability of the update as I read all 47 chapters in a day. I just place 5/5 as I consider it stable until further notice.

World Background: 5/5
The trialer of the game provided a good base for the VR world background. This is done better than most other novels. However, since this is a relatively new novel, there is a lot of room for world background expansion. I hooe the author can continue on this path as the expanaion of the world's background is exoanding at a nice pace.

Overall: 4.6/5
The story is really interesting and one that I will continue to follow. This is one of the better newer novels on this site. I think people should pick this up to read at least until this point. The MC can be considered overpowered in some manner (compared to other players), but the content is still really interesting. Hope the author continues to work hard on this novel

The idea is good, but it has critical flaws:
To begin :
-in this perfect world there is no industrial espionage, a company can maintain a research monopoly for decades without the government or another company having knowledge.
-Even having knowledge of technology, the government does not move to acquire or apply pressure, even though it would have popular support.
-In that world contracts are perfect and can even annul human rights or law. These are just a few of the points.

I rarely write a review and I can say confidently that I’ve never written more than 5 reviews. But I will write one for this story ‘cause I really like it.

So far, there’s no problem with the grammar. The story itself is very good and I really like how the story is progressing. Not too fast but also not too slow.

I see a lot of potential but I’m also afraid that this story might not last long. After all, very well written stories are, most of the times, hard to continue. The author has to keep the expected quality consistent and most of the times. And if he couldn’t do it, the story would, of course, lose viewers.

Anyways, I’m just saying that this novel is really good. I hope the author would keep on working to make this story better.

There are a couple of things that don't make sense... the mc shouldn't be that fat...

He bikes to university every day and because he is at university he wouldn't spend anything on takeouts or tons of junk food to save money. It was also mentioned he didn't spend money like water and always saved what he earned. Boosting the fact that this makes little sense...

To me, it just feels like you made him like that as a joke to try and make it funny. Leading to this being extremely forced...

I'm not trying to hate, I'm just stating the fact that it just doesn't make sense giving the background you bought him upon. I also feel like him being a "chubby" elf is going to be a reoccurring joke throughout until he slims down from the training.

For me, this is just going to annoy tf outta me as I will always think back to this and how it was forced anyway leading to all mentions of it just annoying me more each time. If that makes sense?

I hope this doesn't happen constantly with the forced try at humour as it would be extremely disappointing. If you want humour it will flow naturally in the story. There is no need to force it as it will just bring down the story as a whole.

Oh, another thing is his chosen name. Like wtf? Who cares what it means in Chinese? He is an elf... chose an elf name. His own name Eldrian? Is more fcking elfy than Haru...  

If he was a human I wouldn't mind him having the name Haru but he is not. He is an elf... It's like the mc is a dragon and calling it Haru. It doesn't fit at all. The immersive feel of the book is again compromised by doing this. I am assuming the Author is chinses? Again this is not hate so don't take it as that. It's just you are writing about an elf so why give it a human name? That sort of thing.

So far it isn't looking like a great book but I haven't read a lot yet. I will read further and change the review depending on how it reads later.

Great story with a realistic take on a “realistic VR game” book. The MC, Eldrian, starts his journey slowly by training and adapting to the new world in the game. Battle scenes are gruesome and, due to the realism of the game, cause players problems seen in real life battles like PTSD and trauma. Alternatively, the realism in the game causes the MC problems in his non-virtual life as well, like forgetting he can’t regenerate stamina after overworking his body. The story develops well and the MC isn’t immediately overpowered. The NPCs have clear personalities and aren’t just background noise to the players. Overall, this is one of the best VR-game novels I’ve read on Webnovel (and trust me, I’ve read A LOT of them.) This novel is one of the ones that feels most true to what might happen should we actually manage to develop highly realistic VR games in the future. I can’t wait to see where the author takes this story!

One of the best books on this app. MC isn't an overpowered monster. Great character development. It really reminds me of when I first started playing MMORPGS .

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