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Wow! your book is amazing! Adventures is my favorite genre. I hope got to learn more about magics. Kinda excited to read more of this chapter. Keep it up the good work author!

A wholesome adventure of siblings witha nicely put tension and cliffhanger. The pace of this story is all right, reader could easily follow. The grammar is nicely sharpened. Keep on going Author, keep on writing. Story must be told.

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As far as I've read, the flow is good. It's a typical isekai, it has potential, but can I give a suggestion? There's some inconsistency here, you're using quotes and dialogue in your writing, I think this part needs to be updated. Keep up the good work, Author!