The Goddess of Void & Space

He looked at me with surprise.

"Porygon, what's your dream?"

He looked at Lilith and asked " Do you want to come with me?"

He finally stopped staring and headed to the dining table. When he faced his back at me I could see something all the way across his back. It looked like a wound or burn mark. Whatever it was it looked really deep and painful.

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I said yep what a concept

It's certainly very well written, with a nicely established world background. There are a few grammatical errors, but the meaning gets across well enough. The proceedings are interesting, with a sustained tension, and the schemes and machinations involved are fun to read.I personally liked how a seemingly desperate situation was gradually overturned, all due to the efforts of the protagonist. The trials were also constructed well, making them seem like an important event, rather than a random examination that could have been covered in a chapter or two, as most hunter exams in novels tend to be. So many chapters spent covering hunter exams should normally be a negative, but in this case, it is quite the opposite.However, the character designs could have been handled better. For some reason, the author chooses to give sexual undertones to every interaction the protagonist has with a woman. They are always flirtatious in nature, with the protagonist reciprocating to a certain extent. Emotional infidelity is a complex topic, but I'm sure most would agree when I say that it's not fair to his wife. The male characters introduced are almost always either eccentric and mysterious, or simply irritating in his perception. It is a repetitive setup in this sense.This work hasn't been updated in a while, so I'm not sure whether it'll be continued, but the available chapters finished on a real high note. It undeniably arouses my curiosity, and I've been left with the feeling of wanting more.

The first chapter indeed pique my interest, but there were lines I believe doesn't rhyme with the style of the palace, i hope you make amends to them