Dropped chapter 2First chapter give impression mc is intelligent due to being a consultant and multimillionaire that quickly changes into him being given millions due to death of parentsAnd dialogue is terrible
Gaya bahasa yang menarik dan alur yang mebuat kita tercengang saat membaca membuat buku ini sangat bagus untuk didalami. cover yang terlihat sangat mengartikan novel ini akan seperti apa
Sorry but not to my liking. Why does most novel makes the mc stupid , which ruins the novel, even through they have high potential “System”. The mc is always weirdly stupider than normal person in novels with system. And mc in this novel was supposed to be a smart hacker that cheated in every way, but after he was transported to another world he became stupid. Those kind of novels can only progress by “The Lucky Hand Of Author” which will get obvious as the story goes on so it’s better if you make the mc smart to have many other ways to progress the story. For example he is so stupid to even try to find out about the world. Also he has the ability to create any skill but has not done that and I know that’d be OP but that’s the author’s fault for making it too OP. My suggestion in this kind of novels would be to make the system OP but the mc would have to work for those benefits. You should be able to guess what I’m talking about and if the system is OP without having to do any work than the only way to balance that would be to make the mc overly stupid which will literally ruin the story. At first it may seem like a comedy but that’s gonna be get boring very soon. This was an easy fix at the beginning but it’ll be very hard later on but still hope that you at least try to fix little by little as the story goes on.
You have got a really good story here! I haven't really read a book like this but I was hooked from the beginning! Good job author, keep writing and working hard!
There are some mistakes, obviously, the most serious being that the boss and the other "people" are shocked and then find an absurd excuse for a "person" to knock down a tree with one blow. It needs romance, after all it is a vampire story. And I would really like it to have a development of creating a vampire kingdom/clan with the MC leading it. And obviously the MC finding a way to neutralize the weaknesses of his new race, that's the most obvious point. Anyone with 2 brain cells wouldn't want to lose control or have a lapse like an intermittent madman because of blood or something else.Final: Writing 5; Update 4; Story 4; Character 3; World 5...
He stretched and cracked his hand as he got ready for a fight. He didn't know how he killed the fucker lying beside his feet, but the power coursing through his veins made him conceive the notion that he could very well take on this bunch of newly arrived fuckers.
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