Psycho dungeon master

This is the adventure of Boris, a kind of psycotic kid who doesn\'t really know what he himself wants, he dies along his very hated classmates in a bus accident during a school field trip and after an encounter with a stoic god he reincarnates as a dungeon core... Yeah this is a very standard and simple base, but hey, this is my first time writing something and I think if I can put a nice spin to things I can make it a little worth while.

Before you start reading though, I want to ask you to be as brutally honest as you can, since this is a practice book which I made to improve myself, so I want anyone who has the time and patience to tell me any and all flaws that they find and if you feel especially kind maybe a tip or two.

Also this is currently being rewritten from scratch and any tips would be appreciated.(the rewrite started on the 08/08/2018)

As a warining since the title probably doesn\'t give too deep of an understanding about the kind of person the mc is I warn you that you should very well expect sudden and random bursts of violence and although tehy are not main focus of the story and wont appear too often please do not be surprised when they do,, thank you for at least reading this synopsis before starting the story