Mechanoid Gear : Survivor of Trezallion

So I finished all of your current chapters. So far, you've correctly estsblished the importance of the game, it's relation to the character, the character's goals and risks. Family interactions and everything seemed fine , so the initial premise set up is all well.Now the issues. Right now it's far too early to determine any plot issues that might stick out. I can't see any problems, aside from some areas with awkward wording, such as "the son of Ren's neighborhood" when introducing Roni. I'd recommend going back and perhaps polishing these areas, but those are fairly minor as it doesn't distract from the pace or the plot. There's also some minor grammar errors just as incorrect tense usage, "Ren never even met Silvia in his entire existence..." and so on. Next would be since you're writing in third person, you really need to describe the MC. early on for readers to build a easier connections. We don't really get an idea of Ren until chapter 5 during his character creation screen, and although it is good that you did so, I personally prefer it to be done early on, especially since you even have Roni, a character that readers are supposed to hate, defined before the MC. I found this to be rather awkward personally. Other than those I can't think of anything else at the moment. I hope your next chapter fleshes out Covenant well though. Be sure to make the world gripping and interesting to explore and follow.  

All I can say is:Chapter 358; If you can stomach the MC’s attitude then by all means keep reading. I had such high hopes for this novel too but I dropped it like it was an ugly baby and the mother was Chinese xenophobic discrimination and propaganda.

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Well, where do I start? it's simply amazing! i read the first few chapters and i couldn't put it down. To me, a story that hooks you in from chapter 1 is worth all the time you can give it.

Only this one is decent.I think our choice Quality day by day becoming worse. if it's 2 year ago I would give 3 star ⭐ to it. now I am forced or have to give this 4 ⭐I don't know what to say.previous last 2 Batchs most popular and great Novel didn't get picked.even tho their Author was Famous and their books are in top 5.I don't WTF wrong with people who read at this site

is this dropped or the author is just a translator?

I, The Mighty Demon Lord, appear in this novel. So character design 25/5. So no need to give points for other clauses.I wish a calm mind to Elyon against the popularity this novel can have with using my existence.Have fun to all readers.

a good novel.. the sense of humor is great.. thanks author, it's been a long time since I was able to laugh hysterically just from reading a novel