MC daughter didn't even take his words seriously and he didn't know how to discipline them which makes the plot repeats every time what make it worse that the girls always disobeys him because he always forgive them everytime
I like the premise but you dragged out the build up to the party fro way too long. It shouldn't take 20 chapters to finally get to the party. The awakening was dragged out way too long, and every once an in a while you go on a tangent about his past thats not needed.
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Cara focused in on her blade and she worked towards the third Xantian Rung. The first rung was the name. The second was the appearance. The third rung wasn't something so superficial: it was the weapon's lattice.
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