Immortalis : Kallisté

"So you met with Micasa."

"Tui, La I'm going to offer some water to a friend of mine okay?"

Love enjoys the moment

well i get confuse by names but overall a good read

So interesting story but I’m going to drop.First, the English and grammar are decent. There are issues here and there but they aren’t too distracting.Story development: this is where the quality drops. It’s an interesting concept but the logic behind actions do not line up 5 times out of 10. This means that of the 10 actions the mc makes, 5 of said actions are complete forced plot or made up reasoning. I’ll continue this with the character design cause they mix.Character design: ok until the characters show skills they have no right to be able to show. The mc is a supposed city kid with no survival skills. Then he is somehow able to tell different breeds of wolves apart from each other. Then he is able to skin and butcher animals. He literally goes from no survival skills to all the survival skills. This is further exacerbated due to him having no tools/knives to help with his actions. The author obviously doesn’t understand that skinning an animal can’t just be done with your hands. I need at least a sharp knife.World background: ok but ties into the other evaluation. The mc makes constant assumptions that have no actual logical backing to describe his situation. Then the author doesn’t describe some things until they are relevant to the story at hand. This leads to even more unreasonable assumptions and actions that have no tells to why the mc actually did it or what is actually happening.

clearly a copy from a mtl i read just changed the names

目前看下来还行，就是一开始的时候对人物们的刻画稍显死板，有点套路公式化，但是继续追到现在发现后来几个副本都有自己的创新点和巧思，可以看出来有的副本作者用心打磨了剧情，背后的故事也有内涵，留给读者思考的余地。世界观架构也还行，能套很多故事来丰富，可塑性很强!感觉如果作者能够继续沉下心细致刻画人物然后把握故事内容的深度（而且不烂尾的话）是一部很不错的小说的!