i am disappointed. the author lied to me saying that the duplicated chapters were a platform error.I had my suspicions and after all this time without updates I am sure.the author allowed the purchase of privileged chapters without any content purposely duplicating chapters to generate volume.
hi author I'm new here hehe. so, as I was reading your story I seem to encounter a lot of redundant words in a single paragraph like 'because'. it's ruining the flow of words, can you kindly avoid doing that in the future? thanks in advance. anyway, I'm still below chapter 50. good day.
Some of my biggest issues with this story are the weird slang the voice chick uses, the pacing and the MC. Slam donkeys? Pay pigging? Those terms make me cringe! The story picks up pace after the fourth chapter and before that, things are really slow. The funniest part so far was the thong scene in chapter five and that's it. The author constantly brings up the MC's hair and weight and constantly makes fun of him for it. Those jokes get old fast. Ben reminds me of Michael Scott but younger and self-aware of the fact that people don't like him. I like comedic stories where bad things happen to an unlikable protagonist (i.e. Dwight Schrute in The Office) but this story didn't make me laugh much
Started pretty good but has lot of drag and unnecessary bs and finally becomes non-sensical and we don't understand a thing by ourself. If author says the character is very strong in soul that chapter he will make a big attack with soul art and drag the plot for sometime and next when he says his soul is weak the opponent attacks him with some unknown soul art and the character has no chance to defend himself. Utter bs.
I liked the beginning of this story, but when he teleports to valheim it drops down for me. Why dont he takes care of his believers, but goes down some stupid sidestory that goes on and on, where you may think that the sidystory delevops to the mainstory and his believers to some random talks that pops up sometimes?
This is an amazing book! The synopsos really suits the book! I relly like how you developed the characters in the first few chapters! There are things that you could potentially improve but other than that I think your book is great!
While the plot, characters and world setting sound absolutely amazing, I find it just unbearable to read. Grammar is passable, but there's 0 flow in the writing. It's like having amazing ideas but none of the skills to execute them.Random conversations happen that have no relation to the current scene (or maybe just added as an afterthought by the author? that's supposed to give a little bit of insight to character quirks? unfortunately, it's done so badly...)I have a HUGE problem with the pacing and flow of the story (at 6!!! chapters!!!) so while the story really, genuinely sounds interesting, I just can't pick it up. ( T T )Disclaimer: I'm not that good at English myself, but I'm a very picky reader. It's just how I feel (shrug)
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