Fantasy Realm - Harem - One Piece - Naruto - Harry Potter - HxH - SW

A great story, well told.  Great characters, well defined.  Problem I have though is that you are asking 1550coin per month to access 25 "additional" chapters that takes 4-5 months to make it worth while.

I liked this story... up to a point.If you are interested in mechs, mech battles and upgrades, this is a story you'll definitely like.  This story painted the lifestyle so well it almost made me go out and purchase the latest Mechwarrior game out on Steam!The world background makes sense, the character backgrounds are interesting and a bit mysterious, and their progression makes sense and is consistent.The only thing that was off for me was their emotional states.Most of the time, the emotional reactions of the characters are within human norms and are believable.  Kids get frustrated with their parents, or are wary about their teachers, or have a love of mechs because they are "cool".  It's later on in the story that I have some issues.When a big loss hits our main character, he doesn't seem sad per se.  He just stays around to do what he can then moves on to complete his task.  There is little to no reflection of him mourning that loss or that loss affecting him emotionally or inhibiting him.  Later, he finds what he has lost but there is no sense of real relief from him.  It's just another day, it seems, and life goes on.  The same thing happens to the other characters around him.  They encounter losses but don't really feel the loss.  It's almost like they are brainwashed or on drugs.  Or it is just a tragic story that happened on the news.  It doesn't affect how they live their lives (even though it happened to them or people they knew).So while overall I'd rate the story as a 4, I am dropping reading this story because of the lack of emotional development of the characters.  If you don't really care about that sort of thing and love mech stories, it's worth a read.

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It see to have a really good story line. The main character seams well rounded and well thought out. I hope his powers progress and he looks after the little girl.

Do you know how confident I am in my writing for a somewhat fan-fic? Mad confident. Like even if my writing was a level lower, it would still be much better than more than half of the original works/fan-fictions.Stability? Pffft. If I can't think of something original, there is always that cliche plot which most people seem to find as a guilty pleasure, so you'll be fine!Story development? Lol please, read the first chapter and tell me do you get the usual flashback of the "I met God by dying on the way home by truck-kun and yadadada," no. 👏STRAIGHT👏TO👏THE👏POINT👏Character Design! Mindless Harem? Ew, I'd rather go watch some hentai or something. But I love the arrogant young master cliche though, let's be real here, face-smacking is gold.World Background. Let me tell you this, 👏CULTIVATION👏NOVEL👏Yeah, you already know there will be multiple worlds and I promise you, I will do my serious best to make it seem realistic, fantasy-wise of course, so you can picture things better.

Oh yes daddy, pump me full with those chappies!! Yes!! Yes!!! We are melting away! Harder do it and don't stop!!! Arghhh, has gosh! You Bad Daddy!!!

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