Ephemeral: A Journey of Souls

The concept is good and the story looks nice; however, it's filled with run-on sentences, grammar problems, and has a few rare spelling errors. The writing quality is what's holding back your work.

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*.*this novel is written by the author of night ranger**                                                                                                                         nuff said

Nice introduction, the setting is classic but well receive. Still waiting for new chapters to really rate it, base on the other book from same author then this one should be interesting.

"Sebastian" I called my personal butler.

"So what do I want to happen? Crap I didn't think this far. Uh..  flight! Yeah I should start with something simple. Concentrate." The darkness started to flicker, suddenly replaced by open sky and fluffy clouds. Somewhere under him,  green pastures expanded throughout the darkness.

Peter: hindi pa naman siya late coach e kaya pasok pa siya kaya paalisin niyo na yang bago tssss

GentleAutumn: What about others planning to do the same.