I read the first two chapters of your novel and I liked the plot line. It's very interesting. Also, the dialogue flow between the characters is amazing! But it would be a clean and a clear read if you give some information about the situation and the setting but apart from that, its a worthy read! Keep up the good work!
grammar makes you want to vomit, main character personality is all over the place. (ie on earth he is a really nice man, like how he saved a female traveler at the start... later on when he gets stronger someone gets impaled by a water spear by their teacher in front of him because person offended him{person said get out of my chair or something equivalent} and he did not care at all.(there's so many more examples of this as well). the foundation of the story is unique, interesting and new I love the idea of growing by understanding the laws of the world, but author you need to improve before trying to write a concept like this, its too hard for someone of your skill level to try this
"My leg." He said as he sat up. Very slowly, he got out of the bed and winced the moment his foot touched the floor, but he did not feel the pain expected. He tested his leg, putting varying weights on it, wearing the expression of disbelief.
I got angry at that joke, so I got up with my food and walked away. I sat at the empty table, and to my surprise, Error came back and sat down. I forgot that Error sat at the enpty table, so I ignored the fact that she was there for a bit. Eventually, I noticed Error drawing. Her art was like none I had ever seen before. I said quietly to her," That's a nice drawing."
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