An interesting idea, and a strange plot so far. I think the paragraphs need short sentences and one can use the word (one) instead of he/she. Maybe you can add a bit of emotion to the characters in their time of crisis or when making hard choices. But so far, it's great on the science side, just try to put it in shorter sentences so the concept becomes clearer for your everyday readers. Go on!👍🏻😃
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