I like the way you start your book and so far it seems like an interesting plot. One thing to take note of is to check the punctuations of some of your sentences. Some of them should be split up in smaller ones and others would need some commas. Aside from that, the writing quality is good. I can't say much else as you only have two chapters so far, but I'll keep on reading when you update more. Keep up the good work, author!
Twinkle and his teammates had moved to their first farming location. They had spent the first part of the game creating awesome great and now it was time to level up. Most players were level 3 or 4 by this point so at level 0 they had a lot of catching up to do.
She was looking out of the bus window with strange feelings because according to her everything should have been destroyed but to her surprise everything was like before, like nothing happened.
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