Each chapter is less than 500 characters.
Read a couple of chapters and nothing remotely interesting is happening.
No world building, no character dept. The only thing that we know is his age and dream.
Most of the chapters are like reading a movie script.
My advice. Pour more effort in each chapter, make it longer, more meaningful.
Your grammar is okey to read.
Instead of making a list of things to do, make it him saying what he needs to do, why and a backup plan if that doesn't work out(Don't you make it like that in your head in your daily life ?)
I will come back later, hope you fix the problems :)
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Read a couple of chapters and nothing remotely interesting is happening.
No world building, no character dept. The only thing that we know is his age and dream.
Most of the chapters are like reading a movie script.
My advice. Pour more effort in each chapter, make it longer, more meaningful.
Your grammar is okey to read.
Instead of making a list of things to do, make it him saying what he needs to do, why and a backup plan if that doesn't work out(Don't you make it like that in your head in your daily life ?)
I will come back later, hope you fix the problems :)